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Personal note: Why dA not let me up this on the word, not sta.sh writer >:(
Anyway my first story about a female programmer and her friend trying out her newest game.
contains: some swearing, Humour and B.E
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For your very first story, this is a very good one :) I liked how started off the story, because with that it defined the unique personalities for Velvet and Freya. With what happened to Velvet, I was almost secretly hoping that Freya (with her being so tall and picking the Amazon character) she'd grow taller, XD)

But that's just an opinion, lol. Good job. And I'm glad you are starting to want to post stories of yours. Its a good beginning to help allow you write things you want to without being afraid to do so.